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OT-A Tribute to NY and Peace
Posted by Rui Barros
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Re: OT-A Tribute to NY and Peace May 10, 2006 09:25AM |
Rui,
You requested comments, so do not take it personally. This is my Professional opinion. There are a few issues technically that you may want to fix (aside from Jude's spelling corrections):
* The text roll over the running ftg gets pretty lost in the background. The background should be muted / taken down so the roll is more legible. I would lose the flag behind the text (you already have a flag in the letterbox), add a soft drop shadow and mask (feathered) off & soften that area of the ftg behind the text.
* The spacing of the text pieces in that roll is not consistant
* There are a few edits that should be cuts instead of dissolves, IMHO
* The flag letterbox cuts off some pretty important action in spots. You may want to either open it up a bit or consider animating the ftg underneath
* The names in the second half need to be redone IMHO. The hard cutting at the end is very rough to watch because you can't make out a single name (looks like alphabet soup). I know someone on that list (a fireman) and I know that family & friends would like to see his name. It currently looks like movie credits that were sped up just to make them fit...and it shouldn't be that way in a Memorial. I would make it so the names are on screen longer and are readable. That should be one giant roll or retype each page with better spacing & stretch each page out and do dissolves between each page. Hard cuts here are totally inappropriate. I also would not have done it over black. I would have used a treated version of the famous "Iron Cross" image of the broken steel girders that were welded together in the shape of the crucifix.
That's my 2¢.
God Bless
- Joey
Post Edited (05-10-06 07:35)
When life gives you dilemmas...make dilemmanade.
You requested comments, so do not take it personally. This is my Professional opinion. There are a few issues technically that you may want to fix (aside from Jude's spelling corrections):
* The text roll over the running ftg gets pretty lost in the background. The background should be muted / taken down so the roll is more legible. I would lose the flag behind the text (you already have a flag in the letterbox), add a soft drop shadow and mask (feathered) off & soften that area of the ftg behind the text.
* The spacing of the text pieces in that roll is not consistant
* There are a few edits that should be cuts instead of dissolves, IMHO
* The flag letterbox cuts off some pretty important action in spots. You may want to either open it up a bit or consider animating the ftg underneath
* The names in the second half need to be redone IMHO. The hard cutting at the end is very rough to watch because you can't make out a single name (looks like alphabet soup). I know someone on that list (a fireman) and I know that family & friends would like to see his name. It currently looks like movie credits that were sped up just to make them fit...and it shouldn't be that way in a Memorial. I would make it so the names are on screen longer and are readable. That should be one giant roll or retype each page with better spacing & stretch each page out and do dissolves between each page. Hard cuts here are totally inappropriate. I also would not have done it over black. I would have used a treated version of the famous "Iron Cross" image of the broken steel girders that were welded together in the shape of the crucifix.
That's my 2¢.
God Bless
- Joey
Post Edited (05-10-06 07:35)
When life gives you dilemmas...make dilemmanade.
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